Tuesday 21 February 2012

tims creative writing

The crowd roared as Kenny the high school rugby team captain slammed the ball over the tri line. It was the first score of the night and the all the parents had just started to drink, brothers, sisters and freinds cheered for their team and booed the opposistion. It was the final game of the season and the winnig team would go to nationals. Kenny Mcpherson was 17 he was stong fast and a good guy. Girls wanted to be with him and boys wanted to be him. He had spiky brown hair tanned skin and mystical dark blue eyes. His best friends were Eric and Stan they were all the same in evry way. The three boys were all having a blast plaing the game at least they were then a dark, vibrant shape appered in the sky, it was landing slowly yet menacingly all the rugby players ran off the field in absolute terror all but one did at least. The cowd watched in horror as the as the shape hit the ground Kenny walked stright up to it and then the cretre emerged.

Kenny siad to the crature "What do you want" hopping that "it" would understand english. The creature opened what to this day i believe to be it's mouth and said "Your species is useless yet your planet is frutile I am going to enslave it. MUHAHAHA." Any normal  person would have cowered and ran away but not Kenny. No Kenny yelled at the top of his lungs and charged at the being. As he did Eric and Stan also charged at the creature but this was a huge mistake, all 3 of the youths flew into the air and hit the ground with a large "THUD".

The creature then announced "People of earth I had wanted to attack your planet because my girlfriend had an argument with me and broke my heart i see now that I was wrong your planet may be pitiful but these three boys have shown me that you have, courage and determination. I am the mighty ZENO and i have decided to leave but first i will speak to the three boys that saved your planet and your individual lives.

The three boys walked slowly but confidently to "ZENO" once they were close enough  he quietly whispered to them boys thank you. then a sudden light and Kenny awoke under the tri line and all he could think was "Was that a dream or, or, i don't know..." Do you think it was a dream?

1 comment:

  1. There are heaps of errors in this - spelling, punctuation etc. Go back and edit it, I will check to see how you got on.
    Thanks for getting this posted up.

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